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Learning Producers 7 months ago
Hell yeah man, what matters is you stepped up to the plate. And you’ll get to it when you get to it. I wonder who ai will choose as the winner (more contestants the merrier but if only one other writer submits a piece it becomes a faceoff) 😎 🖊️ 💻
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Duncan Cary Palmer duncan@sdbitcoiners.com 7 months ago
I've managed to sit quietly and read through your story twice now. I enjoyed it both times! Your preamble leaves me wondering if you've had other encounters? And the opening paragraph, why you noticed nothing strange during your first visit with Kim... Subtly raising questions in the reader's mind is a good way to keep them reading... I felt the roller coaster ride to the park, as well as the heat and humidity, and the suspense about feeling a premonition as you all played. Somehow, the basketball going over the fence into the woods seems like more than random chance... And the gravelly voice must have been downright creepy! I liked the humorous ending.😃 The only addition I might have asked for would have been some details from the moss covered tombstone. Great story!😃
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